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Share a quote from your characters

One of my favorite things about being a writer is that I get to put words in other people's mouths. Dialogue in fiction has a lot of work to do. Sure, it lets the reader know what’s going on and shows how characters feel about their current situation, but it does so much more. What characters say, and the way they say it, can give us an insight into their personality, at least, it should.
Here are some quotes from my characters:
"I despise people like you. You think abusing an old lady makes you look like a big man? Big bully more like. Well, you don't scare me." Aggie Cranbrook (Fur-Face).
"You've been watching too many spy movies. This is Little Chumberry not Hollywood. You can't just switch on someone else's computer and instantly find what you're looking for. There'd be passwords." Carmen, Aggie’s 13-yr-old granddaughter (Fur-Face).
“People who cross me, rarely live long enough to regret it.” - Benedict Barnum (Fur-Face).
“Your hair needs a trim, human, and I certainly wouldn't wear those shoes with that color tie if I were you!” - Mr. Tinkles, a gorilla (Fur-Face).
“Di Wayling? That’s not a name, that’s a horrible way to go” - Snowy, a cat (Barnum’s Revenge).
“Escape now, throw up later.”-  Jack Thunder (Waking up Jack Thunder)
“Oh Lord, how thick is this one?” - Gran, a ghost (Dead Doris)
“You ever play a trick like that on me again and the next time you see this [wand] will be on one of your x-rays.” - Kimberley, aged 12 (Dead Doris
How about you?
What have your characters been saying, and what does their dialogue say about them?
Care to share a quote or two?

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Jan. 12th, 2011 02:28 pm (UTC)
Not Loch Ness? That Ross has got some nerve :P
Jan. 12th, 2011 02:26 pm (UTC)
Ooh this is fun!

Jeroen Meijers - "I never thought a nun would be so violent."
Sister Nicole Burns - "I'm not violent. I'm just prepared."
The Tale of the Lecherous Lawyer and the Nun with the Gun

Jareth - "I am going to let go now, and it would be nice if we could all leave together and pretend no one tried to kill anyone, don't you agree?"
Jan. 12th, 2011 02:32 pm (UTC)
That Jareth sounds like a fun character :)
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Jan. 12th, 2011 04:08 pm (UTC)
Awesome dialogue, babarnett! Glad, however, that you're not my sister...
(no subject) - jongibbs - Jan. 12th, 2011 04:50 pm (UTC) - Expand
Jan. 12th, 2011 04:10 pm (UTC)
“You took your time,” she murmured, not making any movement to look at the newcomer, staring – if anything – even more intently at the sea below.
“I couldn’t . . .” he began, the familiar voice so hoarse that it was almost – but not quite – unrecognisable. “I was never so happy,” he sighed, as though admitting secret he had carried with him all his life, which was true. “Never so free.”
“Me too,” she murmured, her voice hardly loud enough to be heard by anyone other than herself. From TIME

The next thing to happen is that he kills her.
Jan. 12th, 2011 04:51 pm (UTC)
Hehe, now that's just mean :P
Jan. 12th, 2011 04:11 pm (UTC)
Hahahah, I love Snowy :)

Okay, I'll try to come back with a dialogue quote of my own, but that Snowy quote had me laughing. hahaha.
Jan. 12th, 2011 04:21 pm (UTC)
Okay ...

Elena's attempt to soothe someone's pain, from Beside the Darker Shore: “Hold your tongue. I don’t want our fine guests rushing in at your scream.”

Arturo from Beside the Darker Shore on David's fear of love: "You won't accept it, but Stephen's broken you. You can’t stand it. He chips at your walls, doesn't he? He scratches out holes. Your tower is crumbling ... and Stephen's arms are wide open."
(no subject) - jongibbs - Jan. 12th, 2011 04:51 pm (UTC) - Expand
Jan. 12th, 2011 05:07 pm (UTC)
Oh man, those make me want to read Fur Face right NOW. (I know, I've had it for like half a year... it's my sad life, I'm telling you).

I only seem to write dreadfully earnest dialogue that doesn't make for good one liners, but I sure enjoy yours!
Jan. 12th, 2011 05:22 pm (UTC)
Thanks, Francesca :)
Jan. 12th, 2011 05:31 pm (UTC)
Protagonist Penelope Sparrow, speaking to her friend Kandelbaum about her body image issues, in Dance of the Fallen Sparrow:

“I’m too tall for many partners. Chiropractors love the thought of my partners lifting me. My hips are too wide. I’ve got thighs like Schwarzenegger. I don’t fit the mold.”

I heard a little puff of air—Kandelbaum was stifling a laugh.

“You are such a jerk.” I grabbed one of the throw pillows and bopped him with it.

“I’m sorry. But I was trying to imagine Schwarzenegger’s thighs attached to small hips.”

“Easy. Picture Schwarzenegger.”
Jan. 12th, 2011 06:24 pm (UTC)
Lol, it's hard to imagine anyone picking up Schwarzenegger :)
Jan. 12th, 2011 05:56 pm (UTC)
Your dialogue made me giggle. I can't wait to read Fur-Face on my iPad soon. It's very empowering, having a convenient way to read ebooks at long last.

"I've coiled intestinal tracts back inside of gaping abdominal cavities, Mitch. No one would ever call me delicate." Celeste, in Normal

Jan. 12th, 2011 06:26 pm (UTC)
Ew! Celeste sounds anything but delicate :)
Jan. 12th, 2011 07:49 pm (UTC)
Snowy sounds too fun - I can't wait to read Fur-Face. It figures that I have a credit on Amazon, but no Kindle to read it on. Must purchase cd!

(and Jack Thunder's quote is quite amusing, too!)^_^

“Devon.” The name was spoken firmly. Sara glanced up in surprise.

He continued, “You are to call me Devon. You’re a Frail and as such, we are essentially equals. You are not to call me ‘Sir’ or ‘Master’ again."
"I won't! I won't!" Princess Ida shook her head, her arms folded across her chest. "It's disgusting -- and -- and unsanitary!" She paced across the room several times before turning to face her mother. "Please -- can't you tell Father I'm allergic to reptiles or something?"
The queen shook her head in return. "Besides," she laughed, "frogs are amphibians."
Ida rolled her eyes and perched on the edge of a table. "Honestly, Mother. Isn't there anything you can do?"
"Don't you think you're behaving a tad childish, Dear? No one says you have to like kissing the poor frog."
The princess snorted. "Well, I refuse. Benjamin'll have to find another princess. I'm not kissing him. What if I got warts or something? Besides he probably deserved being turned into a frog."
Jan. 12th, 2011 09:33 pm (UTC)
I thought all princesses wanted to find a frog to kiss :)
Jan. 12th, 2011 08:35 pm (UTC)
oh, this is great! what fun :)

from "the one who changes you":

dr bittelbinder: "I suppose you could ask next time, but the answer would just be yes."

saa: "It will not be fast going, but easy, easy nourishment, and bioluminescent. Would you like that?""

from "you were warned":

("blood running")

mom: "Your taking instruction in Drama might be gilding the lily."

the moon: "I am the moon, thy moon. Thou shalt have no other moons before me."

("the wedding guest')

sterling: "I am lately resurrected."

sonny: "You said you were resurrected. That kept Jesus going for three days, so we get to keep you until Friday or so, right? Or Easter?"

karl: "You two, you believe in your Savior. I don't, but I believe in you."

from "the wearable wolf: a novel of technology, lycanthropy, and chaos":

crow moon: "How can someone with the moon in a pocket be one with the strength of the night?"


john fourier: "Werewolves, walking through walls, grading Spellboards 101. All in a day's work. Where's the goddess of love and beauty? I brought wine."

titus: "Remember -- I'm here to make your life all the more....!"

mike: "It's called a gun. Don't worry, it's not registered."

toly: "What, John, our privacy and our property have not already been invaded enough? If we bring police, they will find Holden's stash of secret herbs, and they will want to take away one or two of your pretty enchanted knives. I will need to defend myself for the crime of being born in a faraway land. And I do not think the wolf-men have given the rest of my vodka to the police for safekeeping."

rey: "I like being obscure. It teaches me to feel comfortable when I can only be misunderstood."

dr osterhout: "When all you have is a whiffle-bazooka, everything looks like a clown."

luke: "You wanna know how you can help? I already told you. Fuck off. Leave Crow Moon alone. Leave all werewolves alone. Leave the goddamn moon alone while you're at it."

tommy: "Plot, fine, characters, fine. It's the damn choice of words that always gets me."

ok, probably more than enough out of me and mine :)
Jan. 12th, 2011 09:34 pm (UTC)
I like the Wearable wolf one, and I can totally relate to Tommy's problem :)
(no subject) - lyonesse - Jan. 12th, 2011 09:41 pm (UTC) - Expand
Jan. 12th, 2011 09:55 pm (UTC)
Okay - I'll give it a shot! Here is a short section from the fourth chapter of my novel. Two of my main characters are playing a fantasy game in the courtyard of their home. The boys here ( both are viewpoint characters, along with their girl cousin ) are not quite seven years old.

Kelest said, "Let’s play something different, then. Let’s say it’s the old days. I’m a rebel and you’re a householder, and I’m going to come into your house to kill your family. I’ve got a sword," and he picked up a fairly straight stick he’d brought into the courtyard from the road, and lunged at Kiril.
Kiril dodged. "Where’d you get the sword?"
"I took it from a Telaka warrior who fell fighting us."
"Do I have a sword, too?"
"Of course you do! Don’t be stupid! Defend yourself!"
Jan. 13th, 2011 02:16 am (UTC)
Sounds like a fun game they're having :)
(no subject) - mary_j_59 - Jan. 13th, 2011 03:10 am (UTC) - Expand
Jan. 13th, 2011 12:55 am (UTC)
What fun! Here's my two cents. They're from my "new" WIP.

Jim: “No, ma’am, I’ve worked too hard and waited too long for the opportunity to go out with her; I am not about to blow it now.” (from Madness, Mayhem, and Murder)

Hope to an amnesia victim: “Well, I suggest you try to worry about it less. It will come when you’re ready, and all the straining to remember is not going to help a whit. In that way, I think it’s probably a lot like being constipated: straining doesn’t usually help.” (from Madness, Mayhem, and Murder)
Jan. 13th, 2011 02:17 am (UTC)
Good ones, Deanna :)
Jan. 13th, 2011 01:19 pm (UTC)
Snowy and Kimberley's quotes are awesome xD

Well, you got me pillaging my stuff, so here:

He rolled his eyes. “Considering all the attention you’re getting, I think you’d better reserve that comment for yourself.” The girl holding the can out to him grinned wider, handed him the can, lifted her arms and did a slow 360 degree turn, preening.
“I know, I know, I’m an exquisite creature, aren’t I? Of course, so are you as considered by most androphiles, but the current topic of our conversation is me, not exquisite creatures in general.”
-Jeremy and Jo, Slacking On The Job
Jan. 13th, 2011 03:11 pm (UTC)
She sounds very confident :)
Jan. 14th, 2011 05:15 pm (UTC)
Camels were creatures from fairy tales: and the fairies telling them were none too sober.
Jan. 15th, 2011 10:20 am (UTC)
Hehehe, I like that one :)
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